Many approaches have been taken to better peoples health, some approaches may work some may not be as effective. It has been suggested that the use of metaphors can play a large role in the health of humans. Metaphors, as Dhruv Khullar an advocate for the use of metaphors in health would say are “a fundamental mechanism through which our minds conceptualize the world around us, especially in the face of complexity.” In other words metaphors are a way to see past the words on the paper, a way to open a much deeper understanding to a topic. Metaphors take the basic idea being portrayed to an audience and compare them to a topic that many people may understand on a deeper level, in order to advance their understanding. With this being said, the idea of the use of metaphors in the pursue of advancing health may not be unrealistic, metaphors have the potential to have a positive impact on a persons mental, physical and over all well being.
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1. She mentions Khullar right off which helps introduce her topic.
2. The main topic of her essay is how metaphors could potentially affect peoples mental and physical health in a positive way.
3. How metaphors affect physical and mental health.
4. She mentions how important metaphors are and how they can help people understand things more deeply.
5. Her main argument is how metaphors can possibly be helpful in the medical field, mental and physical.
I think you did a really good job of getting your point across right away. You jumped right into Khullar which I think helps with understanding your thesis even more. I also liked how you added a quote right away as well. I think maybe an interesting hook at the beginning of the paragraph could help draw the reader in a little more. I think this introduction paragraph is really good though!